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There was a moon in the sky when I was young, the old man told us. A Moon? What's that?, the young ones asked. A whole world right up there he said. So close you could reach out and touch her if you climbed the high mountains and if you wanted you could jump up and she'd catch you and you could spend the day. Yer fibbin', said the older ones but I couldn't help but ask, where did she go? Well, she got tired one day and fell from the sky, he said and while she rested greedy people made a slave of her and made her carry them away never to be seen again. That's sad I said. Won't she ever come back? Not in my lifetime he said with a tear in his eye he quickly wiped away but I saw it. And since that night, that night of stories I've sat here watchin' , waitin' for her to return so I could say the old man missed her while she was gone and won't she please stay in case he should return.  
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Sleepless nights and too much time to think.
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:iconthemadmulatto:
That was really weird but very touching.

I got the feeling this was a story being told in two circumstances.
One, a post apocalyptic world where there were some serious shifts in either space or the visibility between space and the earth's stratosphere.
OR this was a tribe of high Indians. :lmao:

(I'm only saying that last part cause I feel close enough to josh around with ya.)

Maybe it was just a NEW moon :?

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Dark is sat here reading this a third time with me and really likes it for the heart warming, "children's hour" feel.

You'll make a terrific Indian Chief with your story telling talents!! :huggle:
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*FollowinTheBlackBird Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for reading. You're right on both counts. The survivors have in a short time degenerated into tribalism and by this time there is little left of the world that once was but ruins and places where the tribe may never even go due to superstitious fear. By the time of the telling of this story the old man is long dead and the narrator is himself an old man and has indeed spent many a night looking to the heavens for the moons return, telling his story, and remembering days gone by.

I've actually been thinking about this allot lately, the circumstances, that is. I imagine in this story a tribe of "survivors in a beyond "The Road Warrior" type world where the principal entertainment consists of the oldest who still remember what the world was like before whatever cataclysm tell their stories over and over to the youngsters of the tribe. The elders of course died eventually and some though not all were inspired by the stories enough to be affected for the rest of their lives. Some going on to become the next generation of storytellers.

The story being told isn't so important as the effect it has on the audience. In this case the story is being retold by one of the older children who's grown very old by this time and not only tells the story of how the Moon was taken but how the old man was affected and himself as well giving the reader/audience something to think about.
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:iconthemadmulatto:
I gotcha.
There is no reason to doubt you'll be able to create a 9 book series from this idea.
I can feel it.
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*FollowinTheBlackBird Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm good with short stories. I don't have the patience to do a book.
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:iconthemadmulatto:
Yeah, you do.
You just have to do it in intervals.

Dark's been working on a paper fish for 4 months now.
If he hadn't been taking his time, the engineering would have sucked, I know it.
Even if it takes 20 years, it won't suck due to that special precision timing.

Maybe just looking at it that way will help.
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*FollowinTheBlackBird Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe you're right. I don't know.
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=teddybearcholla Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful tale, Jon!!! :iconmoonplz:
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*FollowinTheBlackBird Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. I'm very happy you like it. :D :hug:
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=teddybearcholla Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!:D :hug:
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*FollowinTheBlackBird Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D :hug:
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